05-12-2007, 07:46 PM
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The crow
okay heres a story i made up top my head put comment on wat u think.
Intro Screams of agony in the darkness! The voices wouldnt stop. The guilt that he felt was like of nothing he had ever felt before. All the pain he had to endure, all the nightmares and all the suffering he had to go through would amount to nothing as he fell deeper into insanity. " I can't take it anymore ". He had made up his mind. He was going to end his life right here right now. As he brought the knife to his chest he thought of how it was actually going to be put to good use for once. A tear dripped from his eye. " goodbye world " he said to himself. And as quick as a bullet he drove the knife into his chest and saw white.
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Hunters, garradors,regenarators and iron maidens. Coolest monsters ever invented. Last edited by Black Death; 08-17-2007 at 02:20 AM. 
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05-14-2007, 11:48 PM
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I will start writing chapter 1 when people comment and reply on it.
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Hunters, garradors,regenarators and iron maidens. Coolest monsters ever invented. Last edited by Black Death; 08-17-2007 at 02:22 AM.
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05-17-2007, 02:37 AM
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thanks a lot i will start chapter 1 soon.
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05-19-2007, 06:24 PM
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cool really cool um....
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Hunters, garradors,regenarators and iron maidens. Coolest monsters ever invented. Last edited by Black Death; 08-17-2007 at 02:21 AM.
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06-05-2007, 03:06 PM
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Brandon Lee made the movie superb, but Mark Dacascos was super amazing in the TV saga that aired on Sci-Fi.
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06-22-2007, 01:48 AM
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urm thanks n all for the post sakato evans but what the hell does that have to do with my story
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08-25-2007, 02:33 PM
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Not bumping. Just saying that I would really like to have read a bit more to get the feel for this story. Interesting start but it leaves no depth to the character or justification for his act of suicide. Maybe you will still post it?
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10-04-2007, 10:46 AM
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Very good black death, but may I suggest he say something other than 'Goodbye world' perhaps he could say something that would hint towards how it came to be like this.
But good, lets hear chapter 1 
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Just bought a Gamecube for Resident Evil... Holy shit. Scary stuff.
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